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Rohmar Montgo[]
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 01:55, 15 June 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
- Date Archived: 03:09, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 370 words (75 introduction, 230 body, 65 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 370 words (73 introduction, 232 body, 65 behind the scenes)
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:THRWP:NOVELS
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Support[]
- Wok142 (talk) 21:16, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
- Lewisr (talk) 22:26, 22 June 2024 (UTC)
- Xd1358 (Talk) 17:18, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
- Zed42 (talk) 11:29, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
- Sanathestarr (talk) 16:42, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
- Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 02:27, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
Object[]
Wok[]
The "As a member of the Jedi Order" part of the first sentence in the Biography seems a bit redundant to me. I personally think it'd be fine to remove, but if you don't agree with that, I would recommend at least changing it to "A member of the Jedi Order," so it doesn't read as though being a member of the Jedi Order means that you operated during the High Republic Era.- Rearranged to solve the latter reasoning; however, it isn't redundant because it is necessary to have that a character is both a Jedi and in the Jedi Order with links; because otherwise Jedi Order becomes infobox-exclusive: examples being some varying SAs using the wording to solve the exclusivity problem.—spookywillowwtalk 20:07, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
Very minor, but would it be appropriate to add "many" to the first sentence in the second paragraph of the Biography? To say "Montgo and many other Jedi" just to provide some scale. If not many, maybe numerous? Again, just to have some sense of scale for the coordination.Wok142 (talk) 06:13, 16 June 2024 (UTC)- Added.—spookywillowwtalk 20:07, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
ecks[]
"Cogra mentioned the Jedi who had participated in Kriss' network to save Hetzal Prime, including the many who had perished,[3] including Montgo.[2]" The two subsequent clauses that start with "including" are a bit repetitive, could you reword this?Xd1358 (Talk) 08:44, 6 July 2024 (UTC)- Tweaked.—spookywillowwtalk 02:47, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:27, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
- Similar to Lio Josse, tangentially worth noting that after discussing with some folk; while many of the Jedi helping were near Hetzal, it's also noted that tons of Jedi from all-over were tuning in and joining Kriss' efforts, thus making it inconclusive if Montgo was indeed in the Hetzal system at time of death.—spookywillowwtalk 01:55, 15 June 2024 (UTC)