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Unidentified shock trooper quartermaster[]
- Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 01:06, 22 December 2022 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: WP:The Clone—wait a minute
- Date Archived: 22:31, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 1480 words (218 introduction, 1157 body, 105 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 1363 words (184 introduction, 1098 body, 81 behind the scenes)
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—spookywillowwtalk 19:31, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
Lewisr (talk) 03:22, 22 July 2023 (UTC)
Great work, although be careful with who the subject of a sentence is when writing as I had to reword a fair few things in my copy-edit. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:08, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
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Sith Council 09:50, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
- Panther436 (talk) 02:01, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
- Rxxxxxxxxxx (talk) 20:24, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
- Booply (talk) 21:33, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
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spookly[]
Pronouns update.The rest of Aftermath's sources should be checked: some are missing.- Added a few. Did I miss any? I didn't check The Best of the Batch because I don't have it, but I asked on Discord. If the source mentions/pictures the quartermaster, I'll update the article. Samonic
(Talk) 16:34, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
- Added a few. Did I miss any? I didn't check The Best of the Batch because I don't have it, but I asked on Discord. If the source mentions/pictures the quartermaster, I'll update the article. Samonic
"On the back of their utility belt, as standard for clone troopers..." - to use the word "standard", additional ref would likely be necessary unless the episode itself specifies that in particular is standard for troopers.- The article states that this was "standard" for clone troopers because all clone troopers are seen carrying one. Samonic
(Talk) 15:58, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
- Yeah I'm more or less saying that only seeing all the troopers with one in a specific episode isn't proof enough to make the wider generalization of 'standard'. For typical Imperial officer uniforms for instance, even though they're all usually green and usually use the same weapon, we don't use "standard" unless it's specifically in the reference notes for that particular individual, or if a reference note ties back to a more general entry of the uniforms that uses that terminology. I'm unsure if there is a similar source that uses 'standard' for the shock trooper's type of uniform kit, but if not, then standard cannot be used.—spookywillowwtalk 18:37, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
- The article states that this was "standard" for clone troopers because all clone troopers are seen carrying one. Samonic
2nd image for "Imperial service" section?—spookywillowwtalk 22:42, 5 March 2023 (UTC)Ref 4 broken.—spookywillowwtalk 18:42, 16 June 2023 (UTC)- Is it? Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:41, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
- Oh, fixed Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:42, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
- Is it? Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:41, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
Macaroni[]
There are a lot of different sources cited for context, can really none of them support some of the other contextualizations so that we can condense the amount of references?JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:54, 8 June 2023 (UTC)- Removed several Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:53, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
Lew[]
The order of events in the first paragraph of the biography should be amended so it's in chronological order, starting with them being born on KaminoThe ref for the clone trooper should be condensed to the standard on other clones, see Sister for exampleLewisr (talk) 03:22, 30 June 2023 (UTC)- Is that good? I'm a little rusty. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:14, 11 July 2023 (UTC)
How do we know the clone was eventually promoted to quartermaster, couldn't they have always been a quartermaster since being assigned to the Coruscant Guard? I think it would be better to just say something like 'By 19 BBY, they served as a quartermaster within the Coruscant Guard,' then the context after for the unit afterLewisr (talk) 19:42, 13 July 2023 (UTC)- Should be fixed now. I also rearranged a lot of the other sentences, since it was pretty disorganized. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:01, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
Uber[]
The recently-released novelization should be looked into.UberSoldat93(talk) 07:24, 9 July 2023 (UTC)
- Any tips where I should look for this book? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:14, 11 July 2023 (UTC)
- There is an Amazon page. UberSoldat93
(talk) 06:05, 12 July 2023 (UTC)
- Is there an available preview somewhere? I can't get the book (not that I don't want to, it literally won't let me buy it) shipped to me. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:22, 12 July 2023 (UTC)
- There is an Amazon page. UberSoldat93
- Thanks to help from Garde, article has been updated. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:29, 18 July 2023 (UTC)
- Any tips where I should look for this book? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:14, 11 July 2023 (UTC)
Editor[]
Considering the Sep council was wiped out at the same time as Palpatine's speech, it cannot be written that they are already dead at the start of the biographyEditoronthewiki (talk) 02:41, 31 July 2023 (UTC)- Fixed. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:33, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
- Okay so, I don't think we can call Grievous's death the decisive end to the war. I think it should say "partial", cited to ROTS, "end of the war", cited to TBB Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:19, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- Saying Grievous dying was the partial end would be speculative. The episode and even the film itself make it clear the war will end when Grievous dies, per what Yoda and Palpatine say "...the capture of General Grievous will end this war." "...the senate will vote to continue the war as long as Grievous is alive." Besides, this is a discussion to be had with the wider community. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:34, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- hmmm, fair. i guess just remove decisive though, since the fighting was not yet fully over Editoronthewiki (talk) 21:38, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- Sure thing, removed. these things do need to be less confusing than they are. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:49, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- hmmm, fair. i guess just remove decisive though, since the fighting was not yet fully over Editoronthewiki (talk) 21:38, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- Saying Grievous dying was the partial end would be speculative. The episode and even the film itself make it clear the war will end when Grievous dies, per what Yoda and Palpatine say "...the capture of General Grievous will end this war." "...the senate will vote to continue the war as long as Grievous is alive." Besides, this is a discussion to be had with the wider community. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:34, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- Okay so, I don't think we can call Grievous's death the decisive end to the war. I think it should say "partial", cited to ROTS, "end of the war", cited to TBB Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:19, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- Fixed. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:33, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:30, 12 September 2023 (UTC)