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Balmorra[]
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:21, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Dipping into some Bad Batch stuff.
- Date Archived: 15:23, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 919 words (136 introduction, 678 body, 105 behind the scenes)
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:AMB, WP:AST, WP:CIS, WP:FFGAMES
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Support[]
- Nice work! Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 11:08, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
- Erebus Chronus (Talk) 04:12, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
- Imperators II(Talk) 08:39, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
- —spookywillowwtalk 15:08, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
- Lewisr (talk) 15:23, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
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Erebus[]
Hello, BE! Long time no see! Anyway, forgive me if these objections are so-fixits, I'm rather rusty in terms of reviewing, but I'll give it a go:- So while I was reading, I was curious as to why you chose to write down all the subjects that share their names with Balmorra, instead of creating a disambig page for all of them.
- I used Ubrikkia as a precedent.
- Just stating for the record that there is a well-established precedent for this. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:51, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
- I'd also say they are worth mentioning. And yes, there are many precedent articles for this, such as Rakata Prime. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 11:08, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
- A disambiguation has been made and populated. The shared names are still mentioned as they are relevant to the subject and backed by precedent as Uber and Anil have mentioned. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 22:22, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
- I used Ubrikkia as a precedent.
- Hopefully this isn't nitpicky of me, but maybe you could say that the clones were being experimented on by Hemlock and the Advanced Science Division? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:06, 12 July 2023 (UTC)
- Seems helpful enough. Added. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 20:36, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
- So while I was reading, I was curious as to why you chose to write down all the subjects that share their names with Balmorra, instead of creating a disambig page for all of them.
Anil[]
Missing information from the Databank.- Can you make a slight intro update as well? Although the DB entry is pretty short, I feel like it contains significant information. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:07, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
- How's that? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:15, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
- Can you make a slight intro update as well? Although the DB entry is pretty short, I feel like it contains significant information. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:07, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
Do you think adding "Mountains" to "terrain=" in the infobox and Category:Rocky planets would be appropriate?The word "map" (as in the Smuggler's Guide's in-universe map) is pipelinked to Map in the article body and to Star map in the reference note. I don't really mind either pipelinking, but it'd be nice to keep it consistent.Although it is compatible with it, I don't think The Force Awakens Beginner Game is part of the Star Wars Roleplaying series.Since status article use "first depicted" as the prose form of {{1stp}}, it might be a good idea to slightly reword BTS to avoid any confusion.- If that's okay for you, I made another tweak since the planet's point "marker" is missing for some reason :P Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:07, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
This is not really an objection since I'm not sure how to interpret it, but there seems to be an inconsistency about Balmorra's grid placement. The TFA Beginner Game map suggests Balmorra and Neimoidia exist very close to each other, but weirdly, it doesn't pinpoint their exact location. Only the planet names are placed in N-10, close to the square's border with M-10. The former planet is absent from the Template:SWTimelinesMap, but Neimoidia is placed in M-10 (close to the N-10 border) on it. Not relevant for the canon Balmorra of course, but apparently both planets were also located in M-10 in Legends.Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 16:32, 20 July 2023 (UTC)- All addressed. I just removed the coordinates since the ambiguity on placement makes it impossible to tell which square it is in for canon. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:09, 21 July 2023 (UTC)
The very first sentence of History could use some tweaking as the Databank doesn't mention (the time of) the Republic at all.Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 10:07, 21 July 2023 (UTC)- Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:15, 23 July 2023 (UTC)
Imp[]
Balmorra is noted in all four issues of DeAgostini's Encyclopedia that I've been adding on your other noms, so please add them in here as well. :P In addition, the Battle of Endor one actually does explicitly place Balmorra in the same grid square as Neimoidia and Kuat, so that can be added back in. The map in question doesn't ID the squares, so that'll have to be a manual ref note using TFABG or Timelines.Imperators II(Talk) 18:21, 25 July 2023 (UTC)- Sorted. Kept it as TFABG for consistency.
Oh, and as for Anil's objection about TFA BG not being a part of SW Roleplaying line... I'm looking at its box, and it pretty clearly has the "Star Wars Roleplaying" logo on it. :PImperators II(Talk) 18:23, 25 July 2023 (UTC)- Altered the pipelink. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 21:36, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
OK, yeah, that TBB S2 dating ref will need an overhaul. It's messy and has holes in its logic, and its use on this article needs to explicitly connect to "Tipping Points".Imperators II(Talk) 12:57, 27 July 2023 (UTC)- How does this look? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 11:24, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
- Yeah, it's better now. :P
- How does this look? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 11:24, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
Can the Atlas reference not be switched to the Timelines one instead?Should "Howzer and his remaining two men" not pipelink to gender?"to muster buyers for the via the Undervine network" looks like missing word(s).Imperators II(Talk) 13:07, 28 July 2023 (UTC)- All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 23:20, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:23, 29 July 2023 (UTC)