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Tierny[]
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 18:32, 6 October 2023 (UTC) Lewisr (talk) 19:11, 6 October 2023 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A pleasure collaborating.—spookywillowwtalk Always love working on these collabs Lewisr (talk) 18:34, 6 October 2023 (UTC)
- Date Archived: 18:42, 24 July 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 6938 words (471 introduction, 5409 body, 1058 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 6953 words (480 introduction, 5477 body, 996 behind the scenes)
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:COLLABWP:WOMENWP:RESISTANCE
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Support[]
- Fun to see ambitious collabs, well done both of you! Wok142 (talk) 06:36, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
OOM 224 (he/him/they) 14:37, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Remaining objections handled via Discord. This is quite a triumph! Master Fredcerique
(talk) (he/him) 03:57, 9 July 2024 (UTC)
- CometSmudge (talk) 19:08, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
- Impressive work! Zed42
(talk) 12:19, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
- objections solved via discord Sanathestarr (talk) 09:33, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Excellent. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:40, 24 July 2024 (UTC)
Object[]
Fred strikes back[]
"Once Ryvora and the colleagues she had been intending to meet—Yeager, Xiono, and CB-23—Tierny confronted her about the betrayal." There should be a verb somewhere in the first clause of this sentence.Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 23:46, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
- Tweaked.—spookywillowwtalk 00:39, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
Zed[]
Could the image caption in the "Dantooine skirmish and revisiting Aeos Prime" section be reworded to make it clear that the pictured Resistance briefing is different to the briefing that Tierny is referred to as attending?In the BTS: "Sean and Ace pilot Torra Doza's actor agreed with the sentiment," I think the actual name of Doza's actor should be included here. (would just add it myself, but don't have the source so wasn't sure if there was a reason behind it)Zed42 (talk) 05:41, 15 March 2024 (UTC)- Fair; added, and it is sourceable to the same.—spookywillowwtalk 06:24, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
Should this card from Hotshots and Aces II Reinforcements Pack be detailed (that she used a Xi-class shuttle at one point) somewhere?Zed42(talk) 00:12, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
- Tucked into BtS after conferring with Lew. It—I do agree—would normally go in Biography somewhere if it were plausible, but in this case it isn't really since we see both ships she comes/goes in and she does not depart between due to the platform being underwater.—spookywillowwtalk 21:19, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
OOM[]
I think "Protégée" shouldn't be capitalised in the infobox, since it's not a proper noun.Missing Mediacat. The references section could probably use a scroll box as well.OOM 224 (he/him) 15:26, 18 March 2024 (UTC)Would be good if "Meeting a pilot" could establish that Venisa was in an X-wing with her droid when she's first mentioned."As the agent looked on, CB-23 was then electrocuted in an attempt to" — who electrocuted CB?"with the latter commander ordering their vessel to set course for the world" — not clear as to whether this is Pyre or Galek.OOM 224 (he/him/they) 21:05, 18 June 2024 (UTC)- Sorted the above.—spookywillowwtalk 23:09, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
CC-8[]
The last section of the bio says that Tierny was killed both by Kylo Ren and Ace Squadron's fireCommander Code-8 Hello There! 03:03, 2 April 2024 (UTC)- Tweaked.—spookywillowwtalk 03:17, 2 April 2024 (UTC)
Wok[]
In the intro, the sentence "Tierny, Commander Pyre, and Ryvora fled the Colossus before its jump to hyperspace, boarding the Resurgent-class Star Destroyer Thunderer and accepting Ryvora as a First Order cadet" - I think it would be better to say "boarding the Resurgent-class Star Destroyer Thunderer, where Ryvora was accepted as a First Order cadet" so it doesn't read as the verb "accepting" referring to Ryvora accepting herself as a cadet.- Last sentence of Arrival on the platform, I think it would be most clear to re-word it as "Tierny went to investigate, leaving Ryvora in the lounge guarded by two stormtroopers." That way it doesn't potentially read as the stormtroopers doing the investigating.
- In Fleeing the station, instead of saying "offworld back to base," I feel like saying both is unnecessary and either one would suffice - what do you think? Wok142 (talk) 05:47, 17 June 2024 (UTC)
In Onboarding a new cadet, I feel as though the sentence "Tierny watched the continued space battle from the Thunderer's bridge" could do without the word continued.Wok142 (talk) 02:05, 18 June 2024 (UTC)- Sorted above.—spookywillowwtalk 02:30, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
In Dealing with treachery, the part "She then ordered nearby to fall back" seems to be missing a word. Maybe "ordered those nearby"?- Was meant to be troopers; tucked that in.—spookywillowwtalk 04:47, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
Also in that section, the "whom she began pursuing" part feels unnecessary due to the adequate description in the next sentence. If you wanted to leave that in, I would suggest reorganizing that part of the sentence to be "she pulled out her blasters and began shooting at Xiono and Yeager as she pursued them."- In Skirmishing in hyperspace, I think you should use a word other then "dogfighting" as I believe that is reserved for aerial aircraft combat (or actual dogs of course).
In Death and defeat, I would change "hoping" in that first sentence to read "who had hoped" just to be clear about the subject.- Sorted above.—spookywillowwtalk 04:47, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
Do you need to contextualize Liam McIntyre further in the bts or is just saying "actor" enough? I'm not really sure, I just wanted to bring it up since Myrna Velasco had the specific context of which character was voiced.Wok142 (talk) 04:26, 18 June 2024 (UTC)- Slid in; I don't mind it here, though worth tangentially noting that it's usually up to nominator preference in terms of precedent.—spookywillowwtalk 04:47, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
Comet[]
"served as an agent in the First Order Security Bureau during the conflict between the First Order and the Resistance." Since she's an agent during both the cold war and the actual war, I think it would be worth adding a link to First Order-Resistance War somewhere instead of only linking the cold war.CometSmudge (talk) 18:38, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
Macaroni[]
I don't really think we need to mention that Tierny confiscated Ryvora's comlink in Equipment; it's not like that information isn't anywhere else in the article, and I don't think it's actually relevant to the equipment Tierny used.JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 06:49, 24 July 2024 (UTC)- Removed.—spookywillowwtalk 07:13, 24 July 2024 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:40, 24 July 2024 (UTC)